heh... I like that manga. My friends would kill me for saying that but i do like some romantic stuff....

Sweeet... I love it!

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*smacks*

Ok, I'm done now. go 'way.

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I'm a real sucker for shoujo manga. then again I'm a real sucker for shounen manga also, oh and manga aimed at adults too. hmm... I guess I just like manga in general. anyway, Peach Girl is my favourite anime right now, followed by bleach. the anime for Peach Girl isn't good, but I haven't read most of the manga, so I'm enjoying finding out what happens next. I've been routing for Kairi since the beginning, and I hope Momo stays with him. ooh, if she leaves him, I'll be soooooooo upset!

I wish I could give you a better critique, but overall I really think this piece is coming together quite lovely. I'll see if I can help anyway, though. The clothing folds are my biggest and perhaps only issue with this piece at all. Like on her skirt. When you draw the lines so flat like that it makes it look like she has no hips. Even if she is a child (I'm not familiar with this anime/manga?), it reduces the amount of FORM that she has. It makes her look more two dimensional. I think its actually the bottom of the folds themselves that do this. They don't seem to fall correctly or something, and it makes the piece look.... I'm not sure. Also on her sleeves its a similar thing. The back of her shoulder seems good, but the seam of her shirt seems to push her arm too far back to me. This is completely fine assuming she is a skinny character and she has good posture, but it feels like these two characters are drawing towards one another and this takes away from that a little. Her boob actually looks a little strange to me, too. I just see a lot of art like that and can't help think "thats not what MY boobs look like in tee-shirts".... it looks too ROUND. A shirt doesn't seperate your breasts, it kind of stretches over them, so if you think about it the only 'lump' created is vertically (lower above and bellow boobs, higher at boobs) and not horizontally (higher at boobs themselves, lower between them) the fabric stretches horizontally acroess (omg I feel like such a perv for going off about boobs for 10 minutes ;

Then there are a few slight stalystic or mayyyybe anatomical errors. These next things I point out are more stalystic discrepencies then faults, so I suggest you read them but keep in mind that they ARE only suggestions themselves for the most part:
I'm not sure about their profiles. I know its your style and all, but I would have either rounded her nose, or made his more boxy. Because the way it is, hers is only slightly softer and therefore they have similar looking profiles. I like her chin, but his feels a little cut off. By that I mean that his lower lip doesn't feel like it goes in enough. Again, strictly stylistic. Theres nothing wrong with it the way it is. About his overall pose, his upper body looks ok, but I think you curved him a little too much. I mean It looks like he's leaning forward forward forward and then suddenly his legs and butt are kind of behind himself, and that looks a little strange (specifically its the line in his back that continues down) I would simply make the lines less bold and connect properly with the hips. I would not move the hips forward and leave the curve, because then it feels like hes standing close to her, leaning back and then bending forward.... do you see what I mean?
Her anatomy is overall good I think, except that her pose is a little static. Kind of looks like shes not really into it and shes just standing there. Especially the hand on his arm. I would have tried to make her either holding his side or, better yet, reaching up and holding his hand thats on her head. This just makes her more involved in the piece itself.

I would definately take the time to include a real background. As I said, most of these things are really little--the piece is really fine the way it is.

WTFBBQ is "stalystic" omg I know I made a lot of spelling errors but that one just doesn't even make sense (omg its like 7 am here ;;; ) thats supposed to say stylistic. OMG what was I thinking ;;;

thanks, that should give me lots to think about when I redo it. I find true profiles difficult, but your input should help. as far as clothing and style, it's an are I really need to improve alot in. as far as breasts, I can't use mine as referenc, since I don't have any I probably could draw better breasts, but I may be a bit embrassed, so I don't spend much time on them. Oh well, it all just needs a little fixing up here and there. Practice, practice, it's the only way to get better. maybe I should look up some reference material for japanese school uniforms. I've always had trouble with the way clothing falls, I guess I'm much better at nudes, lol. really, thanks a lot, I felt somethings weren't quite right and it's sometimes difficult to figure out what when it's your own piece.

manga is manga. that's what i've learned. I love manga in general so yay for us!^^

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*yawns and stares blankly*

*smacks*

Ok, I'm done now. go 'way.

i like it. great job!

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Death Note is amazing!

*Holding on to my angel and not letting go <3*